What is your opinion?
Fantastic!
"Wow. I loved the twist and the reveal : the reveal as to what the MC's world is really about. I actually really enjoyed it. At the start, I admit to being slightly thrown as I didn't totally understand what was going on, but then you cleared it all up in the third and fourth chapter. You could perhaps ground the reader slightly in the first few pages, but that is optional. Overall, I really enjoyed this story. Brilliant! I'm giving you a five because the dialogue was realistic, the twist really took me over and made me love the plot, which I loved. Fabulous!"
Great!
"I have to admit that I don't like comedies. It was a great thing that I didn't give up on this story as soon as I saw the second genre. I like how the dialogues are very natural. I did feel like talking with my best friend. Maybe that was why I could read the funny conversations between the two characters. I also like how you wrote the last chapter and turned all of the 'fun' of being a grim reaper (That's what the main character was, right?) to a sad fact of grief. You kept the 'fun' in the ending, though, which made it even better because you are consistent with your sense of humor there. I found some mistakes in chapter 4, though. In the first paragraph, isn't it supposed to be 'exits', not 'exist'? And in later paragraphs, the part when there are long dialogues, you missed a full stop. You might want to check those out. Anyway, great job! :) Regards, Kei Angelus"
One fifty four
"I found the dialogues very interesting. The story touches on life and sickness. It left me wanting to know more. A goo beginning."
