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A full and richly detailed world, but with some punctuation difficulties
"This is a story that isn't made for me since it's very slice-of-life, but I can still see plenty of quality regardless. Don't be fooled by the state of the blurb. Set in a renaissance or victorian-esque era (to my understanding), Freedom or the Crown sets about telling a tale by smoothing the reader into the world and attaching them to the characters, no matter how mundane they and their position might seem. The characters are crafted in such a way that they mesh with the world and don't stand out outside of their rank, which is rare to see. Every character has an important role to follow in the to an extent, so very few, if any, are throwaway. The flow of the story is also calm and smooth. There's no rushing from scene to scene just to try and get to the end as fast as possible. They end calmly and appropriately relative to context. It has minor fantasy elements within it, like magic barriers and telepathy, but these aren't touted as grandiose and amazing elements. They're every day occurrences and elements, like eating and breathing, so the flow of the story isn't broken just to say 'oh look, big explosion'. Another element I liked was the detailing. There are plenty of details in a scene so you can get a very good picture of what you're looking at and what the character is doing. They even add moments of activity during dialogue to give the reader a 'breather', so to speak. For the negatives, they have issues with punctuation, specifically with commas. Considering the problem is consistent, they'll need a friend or someone else to tell them all the problems and what not to do. This really only needs mentioning for the first chapter, so as not separating a pronoun at the end of a dialogue with a comma. There are also a few typos and forgotten words, but these are easily remedied. Unfortunately as mentioned at the start of this review; I was unable to keep reading as this story is heavy in slice-of-life, but I skipped a few chapters ahead a few times, and the quality mentioned here did not drop. It's consistent and it's very solid. I've recommended it to two people to whom this type of story interests greatly as a result. They're better at reviewing than I am. Keep up the good work. With some polish, it can very well be its own big book in the future."
Freedom Or The Crown
"So far I am really enjoying this, though I have not finished, I think you provided a lot of material to work with throughout your chapters. I was a bit wary of reading another story that involved those in power, the struggle for the thrown, and the constant debate on freedom or responsibility. However, I believe you did a nice job tackling this type of storyline, and it certainly fits well in your writing style. I also think the dialogue within the story comes off more naturally than most people tend to take it when considering a fantasy thrown novel, and there is quite a lot of dialogue within this story. There are a few run-on sentences, grammar issues, and questionable ways some of the sentences are structured. The blurb also has a few grammar and typo mistakes. But, I do think you were able to expand on the universe and maintain a stable world as you continued writing. I look forward to reading more!"
Freedom or the crown
"I enjoyed the plot & the characters of this fantasy adventure. There were lots of surprises and magic! I'm looking forward to following the next adventure......"
Freedom or the Crown
"I love the story line so far! I would likw to know what prince Oswald looks like now that he is older and maybe a littlw more back story to their relationship. I'm a romantic though so I likw to know where relationships are heading in a book. keep writing because I can't get enough of it! It just needs a bit of tuning up, extra words, typos that sort of thing. Otherwise it was great!"
