What is your opinion?
Chapter 1 and 2!
"I would like to file a formal objection to everything that happened on Aquas’s seventh birthday. My poor baby! Aquas’s sweetness immediately made me care about him, especially in the contrast between his innocence and the dangerous world waiting to claim him. His wish for his family to be together made the attack hurt even more. The relationship between Aquas and Maria gives these opening chapters their emotional heart, and her determination to protect him made the confrontation genuinely painful. The mysterious man in white was also wonderfully unsettling. He is refined, gentle, and charming enough to earn a child’s trust while very clearly knowing far more than he admits. Sir, you do not get to call a child “little prince,” conceal your name, arrange a surprise family reunion, and expect me not to become suspicious. Samael, however, has my complete loyalty. He saves Aquas on the mountain, distrusts the stranger before anyone else, transforms when Aquas needs him, and carries him to safety. The goat understood the assignment. The action and mythology move very quickly, the first two chapters establish an intriguing world filled with dangerous relatives, hidden history, unusual powers, and a child everyone claims to love while treating him like something they own. I need to know why Maria fled, who the Empress truly is, and whether Aquas will ever be allowed to decide where he belongs."
Great start to Aquas' journey
"Really liked the beginning of this story. Starting with a calm, isolated life in the mountains makes the inciting incident hit much harder. Aquas has a lot of potential as a protagonist, and the mystery surrounding his path forward keeps you invested. The writing is direct and sets up a dark world worth exploring. Definitely adding this to my library."
Attracted! So Much
"The Start end was common idea but when i saw the title, Nothing, I wondered if it's something good? I was threw apart for a while. But when I read the first chapter (I'm still reading and my reading list also included) I wanted more chapters. Keep build more stories like this! :)"
A Beautiful Start to a Mysterious Fantasy 🌟
"This is an interesting and mysterious start! The story has a magical fairy-tale feel that I really enjoyed. Aquas is a sweet and brave character, and the mystery behind the man who knows his mother is very intriguing. I'm curious to learn more about his aunts and why his mother ran away. The writing flows well and keeps you hooked. Definitely worth reading! 🌟"
The start, end and nothing.
"To be honest, you're story is very interesting. The intro instantly pulled me in to read more but instead of telling the readers, show them. What is he feeling? Did his breath catch before he could utter a sentence? I love the concept of your story, it's giving anime and I love that you didn't make the main character over-powered or anything. Keep it up I'd love to read more from you in the future."
Nice story 😍😍
"The first chapter was 😍🤩! I can already tell this story has so much depth. I'm excited to read every single chapter you write. Your creativity and writing style are truly impressive — please keep going and try to keep the flow of your English! ✨""
The idea... incredible!!
"A very promising start! The concept immediately caught my attention, and the cover is absolutely beautiful. The premise creates a strong sense of mystery and makes me curious about what will happen to Aquas after his seventh birthday. I also enjoyed the fantasy atmosphere you established from the very beginning. My only small suggestion would be to make some sentences flow a little more naturally in English, but overall it's an engaging introduction with a lot of potential. I'm looking forward to reading more. Keep up the great work! ⭐⭐⭐⭐☆"
The vibes of Star Ocean and the Tales series.
"I really like the story because of its blend of fantasy and sci-fi—it reminds me of some of the best JRPGs, but in a text-based format."
Keep Walking This Road 🌿
"🏰Dear Traveler,🪶 Every author remembers the feeling of sharing a story for the first time. It takes courage to place a world you've imagined into someone else's hands. I can already see the ambition behind this story. The premise has a quiet mystery that makes me curious about what changed on Aquas' seventh birthday, and that curiosity is what keeps a reader turning pages. Continue writing, continue learning, and don't be afraid to let every chapter teach you something new. Stories, much like travelers, grow stronger with every mile they walk. I hope you'll look back at this novel years from now with a smile,not because it was perfect, but because it marked the beginning of your journey. Keep writing. There are still many roads ahead. May your tea stay warm, and your stories find the readers meant for them. — The Inn Keeper ✨"
The start end and nothing
"loved the story and it amazed me and An absolute must-read! The story is incredibly engaging from the very first page, and I couldn't put it down. The plotting is tight, the pacing is perfect, and it leaves a lasting impression. Highly recommended"
Good story 👏🏻 ❤️🔥
" ̊∧_∧ + —̳͟͞͞💞 ( •‿• )つ —̳͟͞͞ 💞 —̳͟͞͞💞 + (つ < —̳͟͞͞💞 | _つ + —̳͟͞͞💞 —̳͟͞͞💞 ̊ `し ́ Good story "
Chapter 1
"I read your Chapter 1 and I absolutely loved the storyline. It was well-structured and stayed true to the point. The idea is unique and I really liked the way you inserted the character pictures—they made the story more interesting and helped bring the scenes to life in my imagination. I'm excited to read the next chapters!"
nice story
"The story is very nice for children , i don't like that much isekai stories but still i will say it's good for children and readers. There are some mistakes you should correct. BTW nice work, keep going."
I’m not a seasoned critic so... I’m just gon say the pacing had me glued to the book from page one, I love the plot and highly recommended
"I’m not a seasoned critic so... I’m just gon say the pacing had me glued to the book from page one, I love the plot and highly recommended "
Review
"I noticed some perspective changes, like going from 3rd to 1st person. I also noticed little detail parred with repetive expiations on the actions. I think this story is good but could use some work and i would recommend getting rid on the AI pictures, i understand you want to show your characters but the pictures actually harm your story by changing the background and making characters seem older then they are."
The start,end and nothing
"Plz write more"
