Chapter 1 s*x worker
Under the Neon light
Chapter one
Raven's P.O.V
" That's your work, strip now, I paid for you" the drunk rich man shouted
It all started when my mother died, she was the only one who cared, I spent only five years with her and those five years are something treasurable and dear to my heart.
My father who has always been a useless and irresponsible to the family. He married another wife few months after my mother death, I didn't see my mother's corpse but a burial was held for her.
my father new wife Susan showed me hell I was the slave of the family. I was raised in the middle of people that hated me. My father never cared, always siding with Susan and calling me a mistake
And here I am this same mistake that will always be a mistake dancing under a neon light for this drunk old bastard.
"Raven! Raven!!" Susan yelled, I flinched realising I had zone out all this while. A slap sounded on my cheek
"You bastard, did you see your mother's ghost while performing for my client" she yelled that was when I realised the old man was no longer there.
"Am sorry mum" I quickly apologised cause I knew if I didn't I won't be eating that night. I did be the one to dance for clients buh I won't even have a taste of the money
"That is for your nasty mother in heaven, don't ever call me your mother, daughter of a slot"she yelled "Florida get me one of the whip"
"Omg not florida, she is a replica of her mother," I thought
"Ohh mum, I got the one that will remind her she belongs to us" Florida said making sure the word hits me
That night I was beating beyond recognition and still sent to dance on the poll. There eyes were roaming my body countless men who wanted to have a taste of me. I wonder who will buy me tonight.
They were spraying money on me, some even came too far and spank my ass, inflated at the bastard who did that, he was about to move his hands forward when I kicked him in the mouth with my heels.
He laughed like a psychopath and when I looked again he was gone.Susanne came over and told the guests the show was out. I was surprised then she came over and dragged me away,I was relieved i was out of the spot light.
But we got outside and I was threw into a Grey Mercedes Benz.
Immediately I got in, the door was locked and she mouthed "treat him well" and vanished. When I looked forward I realised it was the psychopath that spanked my ass.
" Hello sassy girl" he smirked from the front seat
"Why am I here" I said wanting nothing than to be away from him
"Well, I bought you for tonight. Sussy sold you at a very high price but it's all for me to get a good taste of you so it's worth it" he said and licked his lips.I could feel his eyes on my nipple, that was when I realized I was still in the seductive wear from earlier to make things worse I was far away and I had no idea what area I was.
"May you and Susan rot in hell" I half yelled that was when he stopped at a big grand hotel. He came out and opened the car like a gentle man which I knew was all a facade to deceive the people around. I refused and he showed me his knife which was in his trousers. I cooperated immediately I can't lose my life just yet. I need to make it and escape Susan and my day, I need to be on my own and be successful but how??? those were what I was thinking about when the knife was already in my throat.
What do I do, should I scream, should I cooperate what if those people outside all work for him
Next episode coming soon!!









Wow... this first chapter really pulled me in. I already feel so attached to Raven. My heart honestly hurts for her. No one should have to carry so much on their shoulders, yet she keeps moving forward without giving up. She's such a hardworking, resilient, and inspiring character.I also loved the way you introduced her. You didn't just tell us who she is—you made us feel her struggles and emotions. That made it easy to connect with her from the very beginning. I'm already rooting for her and hoping things get better, even though I know the journey probably won't be easy.Your writing flows naturally, and the emotions felt genuine. This is the kind of opening that makes readers want to keep turning the pages.I'm definitely looking forward to Chapter 2 and seeing how Raven's story unfolds. Wishing you the best with this novel—I'll be following along!
What a chapter. I like how you lean into Raven's emotions and delve into her job as a sex worker. I do feel like some grammatical errors could be fixed here, such as some run-on sentences. Raven seems very tough, in my opinion, and I'm excited to see where her journey takes her!
It’s a good first chapter. I noticed a few grammatical errors, but all aside, you have l a laid a solid foundation for your story. Susan is a bitch, I hope she gets what coming to her in the end. I’m rooting for raven and hopefully a comfortable happy ever after.