What is your opinion?
The Last Dance
"From the moment I read the first few lines I really did like the story. It was a thriller of sorts. However, I felt that at some points the story slowed down too much and then proceeded to go by way too fast. That being said descriptions and the over all tone of the writer was great."
The Last Dance
"I loved the realistic reactions towards tragedy and was intrigued by the title. I also like the characters general being. However, I found the plot wasn't very strong - not because it Was a bad story (the plot actually does have lots of potential) but simply because it seemed a lot of things were just being made up as you wrote. I liked the idea of the war veteran, her background in general, etc, but I think you can improve. Try grounding us more at the start, so the history doesn't come as a shock, and perhaps make the MC wonder more about her ability to speak Russian. Also, the MC isn't a teenager, so the writing style should, in my opinion, have less Teen Angst. Other than that, there were some funny parts, your grammar was fine and the overall story was inventive. Nice!"
