What is your opinion?
Left Me Wanting More
"I found the introduction to the narrative intriguing. The characters have been defined but there is still more I want to know about them and look forward to getting to know them better. The plot line is enticing and leaves me wanting to find out more. There is a line at the end of chapter one which is probably not meant to be there: "Start writing here ... ""
A Solid Start
"I'm sorry I didn't get this up earlier! Overall, I feel the plot has a nice start and the characters are nicely rounded for the first chapter. I'm fond of Star because she does come across as rather adorable and fiercely loyal to Greff. They're a nice contrast to one another. The dialogue flowed nicely and I'm not sure it's because some phrases were predictable or if we as readers become comfortable with Greff & Star quickly. There were a number of grammatical errors and thankfully, it didn't hinder the pacing. I'd still go over it with a fine eye though. I wanted to know more about this new world but there wasn't enough information available, even for a first chapter. Maybe more facts should be added for an increased sense of mystery."
