What is your opinion?
Nicely Done!
"I usually don't read fantasy stories but I was hooked right from the beginning with yours. Very intriguing stuff. I can easily see this as a full-length book. I particularly enjoyed your writing style. Job well done!"
Yikes!
"A chilling story! It kept me engaged and curious the whole time. You're opening was great, and you didn't drop it throughout the whole story. I loved the setting toward the beginning. It was fresh and evocative. The idea of the angel...and the being from the shard...was very interesting. I loved your descriptions and the fear that you created throughout the story. I was rooting for the protagonist throughout the story and feel a little sorry for him right now. Very good work!"
Excellent short story
"Powerful and interesting short story. Giving this one 5 stars because it's not an often used trope and I wanted to keep reading when I reached the end. I would like to read a collection of Bergen Kris short stories or at least know what happens to the main character. More please."
"Bastard trolls..."
"I know you mentioned thinking of making this into the introductory chapter of a longer story... What you have so far definitely intrigues me! My favorite bit is the twist about poor Bergen giving the creature the inspiration for its identity. What would interest me the most in the rest of the story is the relationship between the Ordruir and Bergen. I only docked you technical stars because in the paragraph when the comet fell, you mistyped Bergen's name "Bergin"... and I believe there were some unnecessary commas strewn about, but nothing at all major. Only plot/setting things missing (just opinion, of course!) might be a little more explanation of what sort of setting or world this takes place in, unless your purpose was to keep this ambiguous. Also possible I could've missed it. Definitely got a medieval, Skyrim-ish feel. Is that right.? Hope I was helpful. Nicely written. Don't be a stranger- -S.A."
