What is your opinion?
Funny
"I liked the voice of this writing. The sarcasm and honesty of it was very enjoyable. The writing switched tenses at times, but other than that, I thought that it was well written. I want there to be more! Good work. And good luck in the contest!"
Depressingly humorous
"We've all had times like this, and somehow reading this was better at 8 am in my boxers after having some drinks last night. Truly stoked my self-loathing -- Thanks! A few sentences are a bit wordy. Example: ...beer was truly impeding on my thought processes today. Could be ...beer truly impeded my thought process... or use a metaphor Seems crisper, cleaner this way, and a little more active. Maybe read for sentences that can be shortened up. "Retarded" is kind of a no-no word at this point if you feel you can substitute it with something else."
