Bullies suck

"Good story. The class/caste system seems interesting and I look forward to seeing where it goes. It did seem odd that a rich girl who was already the subject of bullying was going out on her own...willingly...and without protection. Other than that, the plot was intriguing. On the technical side, I found a few things to tighten up: "The girl had the subject [...]" Missing "been" "The girl found the quiet, solitude relaxing." Doesn't need the comma, unless you meant to use "quiet" as a noun and not as an adjective of "solitude." If it was supposed to be a noun, I might suggest restructuring the sentence. "They were hired as maid, and gardeners, and [...]" I think "maid" should be "maids." Also, the and before "gardeners" doesn't need to be there. The semicolons around "a Shifter" should just be commas. The dialogue in last remaining paragraphs should be extracted and placed on their own lines. If you're like me, you were just getting the story and plot out of your head to worry about the technical stuff later. Sometimes it just helps to get an idea out of the head and into the world! Shifters has a good start now - keep it going!"