What is your opinion?
Good Beginning
"This is a good start to your story. I enjoyed a trip down memory lane as you took me back to school. Your characters are bright and feel real. As i am unsure where it is going i can't comment on the plot. You have given yourself a good diving board to continue from and build your story around. You are missing a few words here and there and sometimes have used the wrong word where something else would make your story clearer and more readable. Every writer has to edit edit edit, reading your work aloud will help you find those pesky mistakes. I have a good friend who reads over mine for me and then shows me the changes needed so i learn as i go. I encourage you to keep writing, there is a passion underlying your words that shines through."
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