What is your opinion?
My Review
"You write in a way that I can tell that you are a writer with enough ideas. The second chapter in the end is negritado, I do not know if it was a mistake or a creativity of yours, but it made me a bit confused. The rest is fine, I'm still reading and I confess that I'm enjoying the story."
A Story Well Traveled
"Only read the first chapter but I may read more as this is intriguing. I'm not sure about the use of the present tense. It's unusual but it may add to the somewhat uncomfortable feeling you seem to be going for. There may be a better way to start, it's good to have a hook at the beginning. It's clear we're in some strange world although not your classic medieval fantasy type world. There's a combination of the familiar and the weird. Your descriptions are very vivid."
