What is your opinion?
Funny as hell
"I love where this is going. The internal dialogue style of writing is great - I love how the characters express themselves like actual annoyed people talk. I also enjoy the setting and the irreverent descriptions of events and mythical creatures. There were a few typos here and there and I jotted down some of the more obvious ones I noticed: - "I saw most of it, and whoever records the event did if I was away, asleep, or sick." Needs rewriting. - "Stormweather's a pretty small school, but I'm not alone in the regard of my parents dropping me off at the end of mandatory breaks and not picking me up until another one rolls around." I think I know what you are trying to see, but it could probably by worded better. I think you were trying to say that the school population is small, and that the character "lives" at the school through the school year excluding school breaks. I think those two thoughts would work better independently of each other, but that's just my thought. - In the Forward you mention that Alex had lived at the school for almost 10 years. In chapter 1 you mention that she's lived next to the Roanoke Split for eleven years. Am I correct to assume that both the school and where Alex lives with her parents is right next to the split? Or is Ambrose the person talking and not Alex? Based on "My First Day - Angel," I think it might be Ambrose. Little confused. I saw some tense issues with some of the sentences switching between past and present, but I don't want to nitpick or focus on the technical side. Story-wise, this story was great and was a ton of fun. I can't wait for the next parts!!!"
YA with an Attitude
"A completely refreshing and unexpected take on the 'magic academy' genre, and from the very first sentence, I knew I wasn't going to yawn. I love how each chapter comes from a different student's perspective, and each one has a unique, but very personal, attitude. The catalog of beasts and the strict--yet bizarre--rules of the Academy are a lot of fun, and the story is dripping with satiric humor throughout. This is the YA story for kids who have become jaded with YA formulas and want something magical but with a bit more kick. We only get 4 chapters, so there's not much sense of where this is heading, though I know it's going in the right direction. I can't wait to read more, and with chapters so concise and teasingly short, you could gobble this up in an evening even if it was 400 pages. Excellent beginning and very, very anxious to read more. Thanks for writing a playful YA story that isn't afraid to say "fuck"! :)"
