What is your opinion?
Captivating
"Imaginative- emitional and mysterious-I was into the story as the writer created a virtual reality experience with words. Jo Perry is a true talent, I hope she will give us more of her inteligent and provoking views of the human condition and our future without our past."
AWESOME
"Really good writing, I absolutely loved the story. The world was visceral and the character believable. Just enough tech entered into it to set the scene. Ill be looking out for your future works."
Litle Slices
"A well written description of a future dystopia brought on by the omnipresence of computers. The world that is described is a waking nightmare, where machines replace people and meaningful conversation. can no longer exist. The convincing vivid details make us wonder if this is the kind of world to which we are heading."
Little Slices
"This story scares me and i like it. The avatars , the cold future of Los Angeles and Isaac a teacher with a mysterious bloody nose and insomnia is almost lost or out of place and i want to know what will happen next, will he loose his job will he assimilate to this computer generated app world? Keep going Jo Perry . i am in, give us more!"
Little Slices
"How wonderfully evocative this story is. It brings a small 'slice' of experience vividly to life in an immediate and intimate way, so that one breathes with the character, and feels the mystery, his confusion and then the dawning of strange realities of this man's world, as if they are one's own. Humor and compassion abound in this tiny portrait of a single soul doing his best in the daylight of a future world."
I love it and want more!
"As someone increasingly overwhelmed by technology, this story made me smile and sigh in dismay at the same time. My only problem with the story is that I want to know what happens next -- I vote for expanding it into a book."
(some of the content in this review may be considered a spoiler)
"Interesting though heavy-handed commentary on the increasingly soulless and meaningless pursuits of modern day youths (and adults to a somewhat lesser extent). With complacency and laziness already abound it is imaginable that the old written arts will be lost unless they translate to videogames or blockbusters, because they don't speak to modern interests and are otherwise too complicated for the everyday man to comprehend. The impersonal contact between people and these "avatars" is also a realistic take, because the benefits are easily understandable (an instant visit to the doctor), but ultimately a very bleak outlook. The twist ending was a successful element of surprise. Remembering the start of the story where Isaac states he has had many "dreams" like that prompts the chilling realization that he has killed many people before, during his absences. My main gripe with the story is a simple question: Why hasn't he been caught in a world where privacy has clearly been sacrificed in favor of security, so much so that even Isaac has access to the camera in Jones' private quarters and can direct its movement? This feels like a plothole. If I may further nitpick: The Edgar Allen Poe quote I find bothersome because it ultimately turns out that the story is a very literal interpretation of his words, and it doesn't add anything. Isaac's many 'anachronisms' rub me the wrong way also, very 'hipster' and don't have any impact on the plot (aside from repeatedly hitting you over the head with: 'Isaac feels out of place in his era') nor make the character more likeable or relatable. Grammar and spelling are perfect, as far as I can tell, with the exception of the all-caps title, which is an incorrect and obnoxious cry for attention and I have to deduct points for that."
Realism
"This was a well-thought out look into the future of our world. The technology is presented in a realistic manner and still futuristic enough to be interesting. The main character has human personality and the ending is a good one."
