FIGHT FOR SURVIVAL

"First off, this is what appears to be the great beginning of a good story. The only issue I see, is that it does not elaborate on an understanding of one single plot. It reads good, with the exception of a couple of editing errors, but it ends without an acknowledged resolution. With the sentence '..... he replied "to" his father....." the word to, added to the sentence, will aid in smoother reading of the sentence. In chapter 2, the first paragraph could do with a little elaboration on what the robots in the streets are doing that is cause of concern with comparison to the issues being suffered by the parents. Remember, if you are seriously interested in writing; you will want to sell your work. In chapter three, the sentence "As he arrived "on", or "at" the campus..... the word on, or at will better support the flow of the sentence. Reading between the lines, I can see that there is a good story here. A little more proofreading and editing, and a little more focus on getting to the resolution of the plots, and it can be a great one."