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Curse of the Mummy
"A very good story... exciting... fast-paced... and I did not found a boring page or chapter. Good work for the author. My other comments: (1) Please check the meaning of lightening. Lightning should be used. (2) Some sentences are long without using a comma. (3) The meaning of some sentences are clearly conveyed in a wrong sentence construction. (4) Samantha said she switched the real ankh the night before the opening. How does Catherine get the glow on the ankh and received the vision if what she has is the fake ankh. This is a bit confusing to me."
A story worth improving!
"This `Curse of the Mummy´ is flawed in grammar and with several sentences spoiled by missing words. It is also very close to known canon, which makes it predictable and easily boring. Luckily, the story is good, and some corrections and some character development beyond mere story purpose could remedy all its flaws. Some chapters are mostly boring cliche, while other chapters already show the author's talent to combine atmosphere with fast-paced action. Further, the characters are less hypocrite than some Hollywood copycats long known. They make mistakes, they break the laws, when they think it makes them go unscathed, and they are greedy and selfish, like almost anybody else. Such is not wrong in adult fiction. So, with the arrogance of someone, who `wrote a sequel to my first Haiku´: Enjoy the hours of unpaid work that it takes to be an author. Amateur, or not. LOL"
