Laruna Lust

"Excellent Storytelling A couple of GLITCHES having to do with your reference to Jeff: "Leave him alone, Jeff" Lorraine was pulling on his shirt. Suggestion: Lorraine pulled on Jeff's shirt. "Leave him alone." Also, some of the dialogue could be tagged by not putting the tag in a new paragraph, as exampled above. Otherwise near perfection. Keep it up, Ben. Susan (S.B.K. Burns)"