Great premise to your story!

"I love the cover you have and the summary is clear and concise. It shows you take care of your story, and that's just what I want to see as a reader! Now, when I started reading the story, I came across more errors. For example, you could work on the punctuation in dialogue tags. I've also seen a few times were a paragraph was ended halfway through a sentence, or instances were the story would flow better if two paragraphs were joined. Another frequent error was the switching of tenses. In one sentence, you use past tense, and in the next, it's present tense, while the two events are occurring after one another and should both be in the same tense. This can get confusing after a while! I'd advise you to use past tense throughout your entire story, because if you're having issues with tenses, this is the easier tense to write in. However, your writing had a nice flow to it -- all the better, because if you have that right, that saves you so much editing! It's also the thing that kept me reading. I got through this story in no-time. At first, however, the story was kind of confusing. You wrote about Leia's visit to Alex's apartment in chapter one, but I was missing some context: who the two of them are, how they ended up in that apartment, etc... This was done better in the second and third chapter, so I have good hopes for the rest of the story. Keep writing! - Jessy"