What is your opinion?
Can Art Save the World?
"Sadly, the magic of this story breaks off after two chapters--just as the reader develops a taste for this unusual narrative and its eccentric characters. What I like about this story is similar to her previous story: both works feature characters that are slightly out-of-place, but who try to nevertheless make their worlds better (and would, if only their fellow citizens would open their eyes!). The gnome inventor, Li, is bursting with ideas, but like any visionary, doesn't always see the practical application of her genius. However, she's eager to learn from her mistakes and solve the problem with one invention with a new one. The characters are evoked quite well, with Li possessing a very distinct personality which is at once what you would expect from a gnome, but maybe from any 'artist' personality as well. I'm interested to see her visit Monster Mozart (is this the same one from the previous story?) and hear how she can improve his compositions! (maybe she can invent the first metronome?). The story is specific enough to be entertaining, but vague enough to still work as an allegory which has moral lessons for children of all ages. My only criticism would be a few typos and grammar slips, such as "One bird were comfortably resting on the only remaining glow flake" (from Ch.2). I hope to see more of this story published soon--perhaps as a collection of stories from this world along with "The Caged Dragon"? We can only hope!"
Not bad
"Depending on what age group this children's story the vocabulary is either too advanced or just fine. Also you do a lot of telling not showing, help the reader picture things going on a bit more. The plot is steady since the story is just beginning, but make sure to keep the moral of the story in perspective."
