Good Story

"This is a good story, I found your imagination delightful and in depth. Your characters were strong but I struggled mixing up Darius and Darian at times as their names are so close. I think you have a good story here but it needs a lot of editing. The many mistakes made it hard to read in places and left me guessing as to what you were saying? It made your story difficult to follow. I know when I first put up my work called Demon Dusted it didn't even have paragraphs along with many errors. I found some readers would not read it. So I am giving you a heads up that it needs your attention to be all it can be! I find reading my work out loud helps find the mistakes. Also asking a friend or family member to look it over for you. Fresh eyes often help see the mistakes we ourselves don't see. Editing is as big as creating the story in the first place every author needs to learn this, I myself still struggle but am learning by doing editing runs over and over again. I wish you all the best with this story, that I think will shine once the mistakes are taken care of."