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brilliance

"Without a doubt the most well written story that I have read on this site. Informative, discriptive, well punctuated. Then we have the story itself, which by the way I am waiting on the edge of my seat for part two of, the characters are more than likeable, you feel them and their emotions, you can feel yourself being pulled into the plot from the first chapter. I couldn't stop reading . please, please tell me when part two is being released. Utterly wonderful. "

simply great

"Love the writing and explaining the whole world was simply magnificent. The writer kept the pace up and was eager to finish this novel although it ended so soon. Would be waiting and love to read its next part. Thumbs up to the writer for such a great peace and taking me back to medieval times of knights, kings and queens. Looking forward for the next part. Keep up the great work. "

The Queen of The May

"I was trying to identify the plot early on, with some difficulty. The Story was about the life of a 3 year old Girl Eleanor, who lost her mother and now her father due to War. Then a span of 10 years passes, bringing Eleanor into woman hood, if you will, with feelings for Prince Constantine, whose father dies, and his Brother becomes KIng. While being raise by a Count, who has treated her as his ward, she has been educated, trimmed and found able and highly intelligent, Yet, I am still a bit confused. Is her education and maturing, the plot, or is your book a story of a little girl growing up and standing on her own two feet and then some, a success story to unfold in the future.............nice story, but usually a plot is discovered in the first few chapters, so the reader can follow where the story will be going........You have given light to your characters, and life....you have discussed history of the realms, rising and fallen. This is a good read and deserves compliments, with a little work....Speaking of work, keep writing, you have a story to tell, and all should be blessed to hear it............william elliott. ."

Needs a little editing, my dearest

"While I adore both your writing and stories of medieval times, I find a tale focusing on a young girl's rise through puberty (almost solely) rather tedious. It needs a bit more to hold a reader's attention at most times. You know that I am the queen of too much character development, but if you intend to publish this seriously, I would add something more. More adventure, more misadventure, more horses perhaps. Maybe more Prince Constantine. For his influence he gets little screen time. There also seem to be a lot of loose ends, like that moment when Constantine thinks to himself about what the Lacovians "did to Philip two years ago" which, thus far, has not come to fruition at all. I'm not at the end yet, but I'm only about two chapters away, and I'm not sure I can make it. It doesn't really even qualify as a romance, does it? And I'm not really even a romance reader under ordinary circumstances. You've got the bones of a good story here, and you've got the skills for a brilliant one, you just need more. I myself have already been through puberty and I'm going through it again with much more excitement with my psychotic niece. I say, get a beta to point out the places where you missed a word, add a few chapters of adventure and maybe some bloodshed from Prince Constantine's adventures in life, and you'll really have something here. Not my usual critique, I know, but if you want to publish it, I figure constructive criticism is better than useless glowing praise. I hope you take in in that vein. Your friend, Dragonmactir."