Needs work

"It is difficult to stay focused on your writing because it is filled with run-on sentences and words used improperly. Most of your sentences begin with gerunds. This slows down the story and makes it hard to follow. Adding periods will help increase the readability of the story. Here is what I mean, "Not saying a word continuing watching the raindrops sliding down the window, slowing pulling up close to a row of small houses each one had the same miserable grey stones walls." The sentence is too long and drawn out. It has a lot of unnecessary words and would have been better as two or three sentences. The entire manuscript is written like this. Slowly read your work out loud and note where you pause, then add the proper punctuation. Hope this helped."