There's potential!

"There are only a few chapters so far, but I like where this story is going. The only thing I want to mention is the prophecy. Prophecies are pretty cliche, so try working to make the rest of the story filled with twists and turns. If the prophecy is too obvious, the story might become boring. And regarding Kiawah, we don't know much about her character. Remember to add some personality to her as the story goes on! Keep on writing this, this is the sort of fantasy story I like."