What is your opinion?
Unsettling!
"Looks to be a great start to a very unsettling story. The setting and future direction are still unclear, but that just gives you more reason to come back and see how things turn out. I like that there isn't a slow build up and you're immediately placed in the middle of a terrifying plot."
The experimented
"wow! it is just amazing. I really enjoyed it and while reading my mind was playing the scenes like movie. I am not a expert but still it is one of the best stories I ever came across."
Good, but could use more hmph
"Interesting. I would say the biggest thing is to explain the setting better. I can picture kids in a room, lined in desks, but what does the room look like? Is it bleak? Cheery? Normal? Give a little hint as to whether the association handing out the tests want the test takers to know what's happening. A bleak room could mean the association doesn't care the slightest. Cheery would make us assume the organization is trying to mask their awful deeds. Also, it seems like the guards come out of nowhere. It's a thriller/horror, I want to feel what it's like to be that kid taking the test, really throw the reading into thew world. Main thing: be a little more descriptive to help pull the reader in and feel the pressure your character is feeling."
