What is your opinion?
Gets to the Meat
"Characterization is on point and the descriptive words are pretty much on to help me imagine the story. My only nitpick is that the prologue can be a bit shorter or that maybe part of the prologue could have been told within the chapters instead."
Imaginative
"You have a very elaborate world planned out that seems very intriguing. It truly captivates the fantasy feel and prepares the reader for a potential epic tale. There were a few grammatical errors here and there which were minor and easy to fix. I was not a huge fan of your dialogue but that is a personal preference. It was effective to your work and furthered the story as needed. All in all I say job well done and curious where you will take this from here. cheers!"
Truly Promising! :)
"Beautiful! Please just bookmark either www.grammarcheck.net or www.online-spellcheck.com. :)"
Short review
"The prologue is beautifully written and the style and voice of the opening are quite a contrast to the rest of the text. The differences are understandable, given the content of the opening section. My one concern is that the style of the prologue is so radically different from the rest of the prose that it may give readers the wrong impression of the rest of the story and leave them disappointed as a result. I wouldn't suggest changing the prologue, as it's gorgeous, but it's something to bear in mind. The rest of the story is well paced, a little too detailed in some parts, but nothing a light editing wouldn't solve. The end of chapter three was a little weak compared to the other two, which ended really well. The dialogue was not to my taste, but I think it would be fine for a young adult audience. I'm not entirely sure where the story is going yet, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. I get the impression things will start to move in the next chapter."
