For a short story, this work captured the elements for the genre it was going for and target audience. We follow Joyce our fallen child who goes along a string of a few murders. Each killing, an elaborate consequence that would feed the next. Up until the end, that is of course to her demise.
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To begin Thriller is not my go to genre but I can respect the elements that do follow afterwards. Such as leading into a mystery or horror. Which in some cases this story may or could of delved into. In general review and personal preference however I think the story itself was served efficiently. The idea of unanswered questions or opened ended questions tend to be served at the back end of the story. Or at least to what a motive may be. Getting readers to question what or why, to anything within said story captivates what a short story should be. (Fiction usualy of course at least in this genre that I have seen).
As far as nitpicks for me personally I would of liked to see the author slow down a bit espial on the killings. Perhaps the anticipation before the kill, excitement, dread etc. Letting the reader feel what the Protag feels gives a sense of realism that brings home that thriller aspect. Only take away I give from there is show vs tell and give us more detail for each scene.
All in all great work, I can see this ( if you plan to) turning into a longer book that follows a string of murders from the murderer perspective. If kept as is still a good read if added alongside other thriller short stories. 5/5 overall 3/5 on written style for the pacing and details. Would read again. Good work.