What is your opinion?
Appreciation and Commission Request
"Hi! I’m Eloise, a digital artist passionate about visual storytelling. I just read your story and was completely pulled in the emotion, the world, the characters it all played out in my head like a comic. I’d love to collaborate on adapting a scene into a short comic! I focus on expressive characters and impactful layouts, and I think we could create something really special together. I charge reasonably and am happy to share samples of my work if you're curious. No pressure just wanted to say how much I loved your writing and share the idea. Feel free to reach out on Discord: luansousa8287. "
So what happens next?
"I was searching for a good sci-fi story to read and the title immediately caught my attention. Just one word - which tickles a person's curiosity about the subject matter addressed. Immediately I wanted to know what the story was about and when I started to read it I could not take my eyes of the text. The concept you have explored - that of the moon vanishing - is extremely interesting and thoroughly innovative to say the least ! Kudos to an excellent concept! Placing a lunar colony on the moon that everyone seems to have forgotten is even better. Sharp simple scenes and realistic dialogue intertwine perfectly with the nature of the story. Now my first question for you is whether the story is complete or not? Are there any more chapters? (There should be as I am very curious to know what happened) If the story is complete and is of the current length then I would suggest you add more chapters (I seem to have missed reading what the progress of the work is) but if its not and you have plans for another draft for the first chapter then I have some suggestions for the plot. My suggestions also depend on the nature of the genre - is it hard science fiction or soft? If its hard sci-fi then you need to address the plot hole of justifying NASA or any other international space agency not monitoring the moon as it vanished. This is the only amendment I see so far. Other than that please write some more ! I would love to read any other story based in this moonless world :) If you don't wish to add chapters then maybe you can write a story from the colony's perspective? Looking forwards to reading more material you publish. Regards, M.Bilal Firoz"
