What is your opinion?
Good
"Start-up is good and engaging. keep writing in flow"
Keep Writing
"I hope it's alright for me to be completely honest with you and say that it couldn't be clearer that this is one of the first stories you've ever written. The story's plot didn't seem all that bad, but I wasn't allowed to focus on the story at all. Most of the times, all I could feel was frustration because I was having trouble understanding the sentences you wrote. Don't get me wrong. Your writing is not terrible. There is so much personality in this story and it shows through all the unique idioms you use. My main problem with it all is the grammar. Sentences seem totally out of order, some don't even make sense, and still others give me the impression that English isn't your first language. My advice to you is to keep writing, and keep reading. Read other, offline novels that are similar to yours so you can get an idea of sentence structure, and discover your unique writing voice. That's the best way to improve."
