Oof.

"I'm sorry, I am all for poetry, but I simply could not finish reading this, I could barely start it. I love poetry, it is probably my favorite thing in the world to be honest, but this...this gave me some trouble, it gave me an actual headache. I think you have some really great ideas here and it is absolutely amazimg that you want to let them out through the poetry outlet, but you could really use an editor. There were so many grammatical and punctual errors here, I simply could not get through it and that absolutely tears my heart to pieces because I know you have someting good here and I hate abandoning a book or piece of writing. So call me brutally honest, but this is only my opinion."