What is your opinion?
I like it
"It’s different and it’s like I’m in the story and I think I want more like this keep going "
Needs work, but has potential.
"The concept of the story is one I don't see that often, so I was drawn in by the originality the most. The plot of the story itself is decent. There are a few pacing issues (like in the first chapter, where the premise of the story is introduced very quickly and the characterization seems very shaky), but that's the only real problem I have with the plot. Grammar and punctuation definitely need help; I would suggest plugging the story into a proofreading story like Grammarly or Gradeproof or asking someone online to proofread it for you. This story definitely has the potential to be an Inkitt Classic. What I said above were just suggestions, so you don't have to take them to heart, but it would definitely help to take these into consideration. You are on the path to becoming a great author. Keep it up!"
