What is your opinion?
Thunder Storm
"I am only on chapter 14 now. I like the plot and her writing style so far. The plot is easy to follow, her writing style makes me want to keep reading to see where the story goes. So far I am enjoying it!"
Thunderstorm
"Revan14 is really detailed. She can add as much as you'd expect to see in books that stumble upon your eyeballs. You can ask her to add just one little thing and she adds more than you asked. Anyway, that's not the point, the point is, is that this book has a lot of sensory detail. She explains how Jennifer and Ben meet which I think is really sweet of Revan14. She even adds a part ll for this. I mean, I never would have thought of that! Awesome work, Revan14. I'd wouldn't answer Mom (as you've seen in the previous comments) lol. Keep up the awesome work!"
Thunderstorm
"The author has a natural gift for storytelling. I can wait for the next chapter."
Wow
"Just started this story and loving it. It grabs you straight away and you can’t help but be invested. I couldn’t fault anything."
Nice work!
"The premise is good, and futuristic sch-fi stories are always worth reading. I found some of the scenes hard to visualise as there weren't a lot of physical descriptions of the rooms or of what the characters looked like. Thus, it was hard to get too immersed in each scene. There were formatting errors, such as variable spacing between paragraphs from chapter to chapter. I'm also not sure why Ben and Jennifer have to hide from the "authorities" in this future time. I'm hoping this gets explained in later chapters. I will read on, and hope this all gets cleared up. Nice work so far, and it reads very easily. "
Thunderstorm
"This has great potential. The storyline is great, but the execution needs work. It feels really rushed, and the characters and their motives feel flat. It could use some editing. Other wise I loved the story, definatly cant put it down."
Brief and lots of dialogue but good.
"I love the plot, but I do wish it had more descriptions of feelings and setting. "
opinion
"the type of scifi book i was looking for amazing"
WOW!
"This story may have long chapters but the plot is spectacular! Since I've started reading it, I am hooked onto it! One thing I would like to point out is, punctuation and using the word "said." Instead, maybe use lied, she said with excitement, She asked, curious about the large rock in the sky. I don't know but the story is amazing so far! I recommend it to anyone!"
