What is your opinion?
Great start!
"It's really good, the blurb is amazing, it really pulls people in. I also liked the future technology of hologram messages and a car that knows it's being chased by the cops. There are some grammar errors here and there that can be corrected though. Other than that, good job! Can't wait for the next chapter."
Review
"I love the story so far. it is very intriguing. The blurb really grabbed me. I have only one query and it may be trivial. The way you describe the wife - fair dark... I think you mean a beautiful dark woman. Fair, for me, means light of complexion. It may only be me. I deduct a star for grammar because there are always things to correct, but I don't want to get into this. A good story with grammar mistakes can be corrected and will still be good. A bad story with perfect grammar will always remain BAD."
More Please!
"I'm already hooked with just the first chapter! I can't for the next. I'm getting some heavy Black Mirror vibes, which I love and i'm so excited to see where the story goes."
Rewind
"Wow! I could feel my excitement perk up as I read this chapter. It was really well put together and i enjoyed every second of it. Keep writing and you'll be famous in no time. can't wait for the next chapter. I think that the car is brilliant and can't wait to see more of him. I do wonder what this guy did to get the cops after him. So I will be back. P.S. I think you have a new fan."
PACK THE CAR!!!
"Pack up the car, because I'm loading some of my information to hopefully help! Here's the deal - I love the plot. I am intrigued and grasped by the computer keys that you typed this story in. The main character reminds me of James Bond and Tony Stark, although the mother seems a bit like a clique - innocent to the father's wrong doings. The kids, love them so far; from what I can tell. I like the car's Siri, Alex, if I remember correctly! Seem's like they would be a good comedic outlet for this story as it continues! Onto grammar. Always put punctuation after someone is speaking. For example, instead of, "What are you doing, Nat" I would go with "What are you doing, Nat?". Always put commas after names if the names end when the person is speaking and don't forget to always end a sentence in the correct punctuation, no matter what! Overall, an interesting and energetic read! Now to find time to read some more!"
