What is your opinion?
The Lost Chronicles Of Cleopatra by Mac Bizzo
"It was very easy to enter this world as written by this author. I can picture every detail in my mind as I read and I felt as though I was present during the entire scene. It was extremely well written and I look forward to reading more from this author."
Good job
"Even though this story has some grammar mistakes it is still great. The chapters seem believable and the emotion is just there. I haven't read hf in like 4 years but your story just reminded me of why I used to love hf. You should continue to write."
Wow this Guy!
"The author’s writing style is intense. He understands storytelling. I kinda knew what’s coming (and I knew it’s bad), yet feeling every word. I was chopping bell peppers for dinner as my girlfriend read this to me. We work in a hospital and she read me your birth scene. I said keep reading. Then the entourage arrived, I was chopping harder and harder. You might want to consider an 18+ on this stuff, but it isn't graphic, just full of clear details. The characters are vivid and my heart thumps from each unfortunate event. Just when you think they are safe, I knew more bad things were coming. From a historical point of view, the Ptolemy dynasty was known for that kind of conduct. Kudos!"
Cinematic and Moving
"Mac you have a cinematic style full of emotional impact. Usually, I like the first person pov. It's not perfect writing, BUT the story is so compelling I stopped noticing. This section helped me better understand your other part called the twins. When do we get a full chapter Mac? Better yet, when can I watch this on Netflix."
Sobek lol
"You added a dash of humor after that intense scene with cleos mom, nice."
Interesting Piece
"This is a great plot/story, and I can see it arcing into fascinating territory. It certainly warrants much more development. I think it's also a unique story; I don't recall seeing anything similar. The author blends action with emotion; a quality that does hold my interest. Regarding the author's style; I felt the piece was choppy in places, detracting from the flow of the piece. There were also some small 'holes' in the story. For instance, toward the end of the piece, was the archer going to shoot Ptolemy or the floating casket? It wasn't clear until the archer shot the floating casket. Further, why was the casket shot with a flaming arrow? Was burning a body an act of contempt or disrespect, or was it the opposite (according to Roman culture)? Regarding technical skills; There are a number of places where a technical edit is in order. As a professional writer and editor, these fairly leaped off the screen. Another once-over probably would have caught most of the gaffes. Bottom line is that I think its a good first draft."
Great historical references.
"This story was filled with beautiful scenery, wonderful historical references. It must have taken an immense amount of research to maintain historical accuracy. I would love to have seen more depth especially during the birthing scene. It felt a bit tranquil where it would be anything but. Loved the ending and curious as to what happened to them."
Chronicles of Cleopatra
"I'm convinced, a good read from beginning to end. With the ability to in capture you , if you were to tell me this story will hook you like the first five minutes of Lost I'd be hard pressed to believe you but having read the story I was immersed like a child, zombied out to the television with just absolute interest in what is going to happen next. I would say bonus points for a story I'd expect to allure to woman more then men but yet I'm now finding myself interested with not only the story itself but researching Cleopatra herself. What was true? What was embellished? And that's the sign of true literary competency is engaging the reader past the point of the story. Kudos to Mac Bizzo Keep writing and I'll keep reading, let the talent flow. Fellow Author, Nathan Shrum "
Chronicles of Cleopatra
"Mac has a descriptive writing style that pulls the reader in. The emotion that he created for each character is individual and believable. The story gave me a stomachache but only in a good way; I feared for these girls, cringed when their mother was brutally killed, and wanted to lash out at the new fate that awaited them. Great job, MAC."
