What is your opinion?
Great work!
"This is an amazing read so far, love how every character has their own "Life", a pretty unique concept but it blends well with the plot. Would definitely recommend this to others as many may be able to relate to the protagonist. Can't wait for more! "
What a Life
" I really love this concept. It is unique and it snags interest. There is much potential here, I hope to read more soon. The chracter is relatable and beleivable. I encourage finding a savvy proof reader, as there were gramatical errors. Avoid words endimg in "ly". As this creates a passive and repetative voice. Out of those used, you could eliminate all but 2. One used effectively was..."the wind blew freely" or something? If memory serves. Its been a couple of days hehe. The early dialog of he main character talking to her brother felt sliightly archaic/ unnatural for modern language. When she was talking to her brother about.....her brother needing to toughen up. Just that..paragraph. Nothing major, but I'd revisit it. I really liked "a bright sky with sad eyes" something like that. Beautiful job describing the sky and weather. Also, I love me mysterious questionable characters/entities. So her Life intruiges me. I loved how the later chapter gave a new perspective/understanding of the first."
