What is your opinion?
Apocalyptic Indeed
"First off, excellent idea for an apocalypse story. However, the chapters at times were a bit too long to the point that the way some of them ended didn't seem to match what was happening back at the beginning of the chapter. Maybe cut down a little bit on the lengths. Besides that, great story and keep up the good work."
Well, lots of work needs to be done young one!
"Well, the chapters are too long so I stopped at chapter 7 since I only have 7 chapters. But a huge mistake is that synopsis chapter. I don't like it and neither anyone else will. What the chapter says is just lazy writing, it's just a huge info dump on us saying what the world is. And its too much information to take in. So that's why the story is confusing. So the way to fix that is to not info dump us. But make the prologue be an event about the world's condition today. That is showing and not telling us. You need to rewrite it I believe because there is a lot of tell don't show instead show don't tell. Don't worry I used tell don't show. But yeah shorten chapters like me, if you want to publish it, of course, make em longer. Anyway, heed my warnings! ~Yours truly, Ruenigami."
