What is your opinion?
opinion
"at first i thought it was slow but then the interest picked up i realllllllyyyyyyyyyyyyy like it"
Fascinating and Creative
"Tatzelwyrm is a uniquely crafted work which grabs hold of your imagination and doesn’t let go. The character development is well-done – the main character Nannade grows up before the reader’s eyes. The plot is smooth and convincing. This was a unique story that swept me away from Chapter 1 on. I would recommend breaking up the long paragraphs as many of them have become run-on paragraphs. In need of some thorough editing and an all-over polishing, this story can rate 5 stars easily once it’s been gone over. My congratulations to the writer on such a promising tale; I look forward to reading more as the story unfolds! -- Brittanny Davis"
An Interesting Idea
"I think the premise of this book is interesting and shows some promise. The idea of a master sorcerer of sorts rescuing a slave girl and making her an apprentice is endearing. The MC, however, comes off a bit robotic. While he saves her, we see very little empathy for her situation and pain. The girl, on the other hand, is a very innocent and lovable character. There’s a few opportunities I see so far. The simplest is some grammatical and typo errors throughout. Those are easy to fix. Secondly, some of the paragraphs are very long and could stand to be broken up. During the 3rd and 4th chapters the prose drug a bit. Maybe some cutting and refinement would help. The last thing I will mention is the witch that was added suddenly into the narrative to take care of the girl. She came into the picture out of the blue. Even when the MC would think through his plan along the way she wasn’t mentioned, at least that I can remember. There just wasn’t enough natural progression to her introduction, and it came off as a last minute add. Overall this is probably a good story that just needs further refinement. "
