What is your opinion?
Thanks for your story!
"I love the story, the characters and the grammar are great. The Dialog is confusing because the person speaking is not separated from the person responding. maybe a new paragraph to denote a change in active character? But still a very enjoyable read!!"
The heart of Ra
"Is it engaging and the characters seem authentic "
Heart of Ra
"I really loved this and I got to find out what happened to Karin and Ryou💜"
Very good book
"Its a good book"
Very interesting story
"Cool story"
Loving it.
"It's a little annoying since it has plenty of word corrections needed. A little polishing will go a long way. The story line is awesome. Not very knowledgeable when it comes to Egyptian Gods but the fact the it has a supernatural twist to it is very interesting"
Fantastic
"The plot is really good. Loved the chemistry between the two. Needs a bit of proof reading, but otherwise, it's one hell of a book and am glad I read it"
Amazing
"Awww I love it "
Great book
"Great story I hope there is a sequel ... leaves you wanting more."
Heart Of Ra
"Wow. I wasn't expecting it to end like that but I loved every bit of it! I really hope that one day this book gets published so I can have it in my library."
Heart Of Ra
"I love this book and I have fun reading it!"
Great read
"Can not wait for the rest of the story!!!!!"
Heart of Ra
"The book overall was great. It was different to what I thought it would be so I was happy. But the story was kinda jumpy. The scenes changed out of no where, the person that it was in view of, changed unexpectedly at times too. Don't get me wrong, I really enjoyed the book, but something's also needed a bit more detail in the storytelling "
Good
"For such a great story, a lot of audience must read your book. You can publish your work on NovelStar Mobile App."
Heart of Ra
"The plot was nice, with some more details it cud have been amazing "
Hear of RA
"The first thing is it was TOO SHORT! The plot was Almost SPELL BINDING! I say ALMOST because I think you could’ve given a little more details and background on the characters which I find them to be very likable enjoyable and complexed! A story has three parts a BEGINNING a MIDDLE and THE ENDING. The BEGINNING is AN INVITATION and THE ENDING is THE DESTINATION but THE MIDDLE, and I quote “ it’s not THE DESTINATION, it’s THE JOURNEY” If you don’t take the time to set up each character with background info and may be a little POV you lose the opportunity to establish each character as an individual. Then WHEN YOU put them TOGETHER COLLECTIVELY we May have a better understanding of what part each one is really Playing and WHAT is THEIR Importance , as far as the storyline is concerned. I enjoyed this STORY and I would read more of your WORK ! that’s just my feedback as One Writer to another."
Review
"Good story! Can’t wait to see how it ends."
Needs Depth and proof reading
"It was an interesting story. However, it reads more like an outline than a complete book. There needs to be more character development, depth and explanation. The idea is there, but it needs refinement and spelling and punctuation editing. "
Mystical
"I like the plot very much, however, it needs further emotional depth to bring on a good climax. Also, character development seem a bit rush and needs additional backgrounder--for the reader to grasp the power and character of the Egypt's gods. It'll be a great story if the author will re-write the story. Nonetheless, I still enjoyed reading it. Best regards to the author."
Good but could use a proofread
"It's good but could use a proofreader"
