What is your opinion?
Very sophisticated
"Although I have only read about 6-7 chapters already this story is captivating, it uses language i appreciate a lot. Most stories wouldn't use words like these and the description and your view on everything amazes me! You're a great writer ! Your story is truly amazing :)"
Sanity Was Dying
"Story was written somewhat well but it was hard to follow at times."
Very unique
"The description right away had me, it was very well written. Your paragraphs and chapter size are all brilliant. There were some mistakes, and one line that didn't make sense though in chapter 1: ‘Is it Jane or mother the same and I am th e’ - not sure what you are trying to say here. Also ‘Where does one go from here and I’m I’ I think should have ‘am I’. Dad’s just after that should be Dad. The end of the line starting with speech ‘How brave you all are’ has speech marks at the end of it even though it's not speech. I think there could be more focus on describing the settings, not too much to take away from the story’s pace but it can help the reader imagine it. The time and place where the story is set will also benefit the reader. Many sentences are too long, but they could easily be broken up with commas or made into multiple shorter ones. At the end of chapter 2, there is a sentence that starts with “When, but there is no other speech marks. Is this a typo or is someone speaking here? In chapter 3: “What reason.”? Should be: “What reason?”. There are a couple of times where that punctuation mistake is made. Chapter 3 also needs more detail about who is speaking as it gets confusing. This story however is emotional, dramatic, thought-provoking, and above all gripping, a unique horror into some serious issues with troubled and interesting characters read. "
