What is your opinion?
A Man Has Been Stabbbed
"Great story, a dude a got stabbed and that right there is some grade-A shit right there."
A Great Short Story
"I really enjoyed reading your amazing short story (it's one of the best short stories that I have ever read) but there are a few parts where you can improve on. Title and Cover- While some people may say, "never judge a book by its cover," everyone always does. The only way someone will pick to read your story over thousands and millions of others is because it either has an interesting title and cover. Your title is good. The reader can obviously see the relationship between the title and the story, however, you may want to consider changing it so that it has a sense of mystery, which might capture the reader's attention. My first impression of your story was from your title. I thought it was a romance story written from the perspective of the husband. I did not realize that it would turn into a mystery and thriller story. As for your cover, I don't think the person in the picture looks like the wife. In the beginning, you wrote that the wife had put up her hair in a bun for her wedding. Usually, it is hard to put your hair up into a bun if you had short hair like the person on the cover does. Also, I could barely see the words, "A short story" under the title. You may want to fix that too. Blurb- A blurb is also very important, as I have decided not to read many books because it does not have an interesting blurb even though it has a great title and cover. For some reason, I can't view your blurb, so I'm going to dedicate this section on your teaser instead. The teaser is like a mini version of the blurb. Like your title, it does not have a sense of mystery in it. Having a sense of mystery is especially important in the blurb/teaser as it will make the reader think, "what happens in this story?" The Chapter- One word- amazing. You have the perfect pacing- not too fast nor too slow, and have just enough description to let the reader visualize the character, yet not too much so that it doesn't slow down the plot. The only problem is that the readers won't have a lot of chance to connect to the main character before he gets murdered. Yes, we'll feel bad for him, but his death won't have a lasting impression on us. I recommend you describe his personality more, as so far all we know about him is that he loves his wife. Are his parents alive? Does he have any siblings? What does he do for a living? By answering these questions, it'll help your story a lot. Overall, this is a great short story and is recommended for anyone who loves a thrilling mystery story. -The author of The Tale of the King"
