First Chapter

"Overall, I love a great werewolf romance with some twists and tension in between. I do have some suggestions and tips, some of which I'm also working to improve in my writing. I do not want you to feel offended or discouraged. There are some grammar errors; for this, I suggest using Grammarly (free version). I also felt like I couldn't connect completely with the character because the descriptions of her emotions and behavior seemed to be a bit cut short. It can be paced with descriptions of how are her emotions unfolding and her physical behavior. For example, 'my head throbbed with the onslaught of never-ending questions.' or 'the ongoing mayhem had created a slow ache behind my eyes.' Dialogue tags should be used sparingly; these are better replaced with actions. Also, during dialogue, the names of the characters who are speaking don't have to be repeated. A trick to avoid doing this is to find certain descriptions of the characters and refer to them as 'she' or 'he'. For example, 'That was until Blue came bursting through the door. [dialogue], Blue panted' could also be 'That was until Blue came bursting through the door. { dialogue], he panted.' I also use Merriam-Webster's Thesaurus to find synonyms of different actions and feelings as to not repeat words. I do hope this review can be helpful. This story has great potential; the plot you have created with an Alpha female to lead is awesome. Never give up. Keep up the awesome work!"