The on-going plot is pretty interesting, but I do have some tips and suggestions. At the beginning of the first chapter, there is an 'info dump' in the first conversation, meaning you have given too much information to the reader that can be expressed in another way either throughout the chapter or the story itself. The chapter could begin with a brief description of the protagonist being immersed in the book with a few descriptions of the library ( the scents and sounds for example); showing the reader what's happening rather than telling. It's a bit rough to relate to the protagonist when she immediately gives a lot of details to a stranger because it's something that doesn't happen. I believe that conversation can be paced a little more with descriptions of her thoughts, internal and external feelings, and physical characteristics of the stranger. I think the description of the whole video is not necessary to immerse the reader in the protagonist's desire. It's best to stick with the most important actions of the video and how she is recreating it, providing descriptions of her internal and external feelings. I'm also working with showing rather than telling, and I find that the Novel Writing Bootcamp has helped me a lot in improving my writing; if you're interested it's at the upper left of Inkitt's page in the 'Write' section. Since your book is cataloged as erotica, sexual interactions are to be expected. Overall, you have an interesting plot in development. Keep up the great work!
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