Prologue
Thousands of years ago, in the realm of the gods, lived a young goddess by the name of Alira. Alira was the goddess of war, fire, and wrath. Though she was powerful, she was also lonely, and held a deep jealousy; many of the other gods had created their own races that lived on the land Midgar, such as the fae and the elves, beautiful immortal races built in the image of their respective god.
Alira wanted a creation of her own. Thus, she made the dragons. Alira was very proud of her creation, as the dragons were everything the other races were and more; they were beautiful, strong, more intelligent than most, and gifted in magic. But much like their goddess they were filled with a deep burning rage.
The first dragons were born deep in the heart of the Southfait mountains. The smoldering heat that surrounded the mountain range helped the young race to grow. But with their growth came destruction, with each passing year the dragons became more and more wrathful. Their immortal lives only paving the way for more destruction.
The other gods disliked the dragons, for they were destroying the lands of Midgar. So they went to Alira and told her if she could not control what she had created, then the dragons would be removed.
Alira did not wish to see the eradication of her creation, so she devised a plan; she made it so all dragons had a soulmate. Their soulmate would be the only one who could quell their anger and keep them under control, but there was a catch: if a dragon could not find their soulmate by the age of fifty, then they would die.
Since the creation of soulmates, dragons took their respective place at the top of all other races. Dragons were able to hold the entirety of Midgar in their talons because of the many abilities their goddess gifted them. All dragons were gifted with the ability to utilize the natural elements.
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The plot seems nice going into it. The major issue that is continuous throughout the chapter is with punctuation. At parts there is a comma missing to separate an introductory clause, phrase, or words that come before the main clause. I also saw missing periods and some run on sentences. Other than that, the story seems good so far. Just go back and edit or even see if some readers will proof read for free in return for first look at new chapters.
So far it’s interesting. Not something I would normally read either, but I like how descriptive you are. I read comments and seen this still needs to be edited so I won’t comment on that. No need too if you will be fixing😊
Great start! I’m excited to read more!!!