What is your opinion?
Engaging
"Just as the title of my review suggests, this story is so engaging, and that's coming from someone who doesn't like mystery! The grammar is on point and the way the author writes is also unique. It gives off the feel of the plays you get in English books (during high school) and that's what makes the story all the more enjoyable. "
Awesome
"I really liked how the author has a unique style of writing where he would randomly cut to dialogue exchanges and the narrative. It is easier to grab and makes it much more interesting imo. A very interesting story and creative title.. So far the story is a 5/5 for me"
Bestestt
"To be honest Both the two chapters are amazing waiting for the third one eagerly if you love thrill and suspens you must read it"
OVERALL NICE NOVEL
"a very indulging story and very simple and beautiful language use along with marvelous world building. Eagerly waiting for how the story unfolds further in the future ."
I want more.
"First of all, I have to start by saying that writing isn't easy at all. Writing the first book is even more difficult, so I applaud you for taking the initiative. I'm going to be as constructively honest as possible. I like the main character, Kane, is it? Yes. He's tenacious, brave, and has a high sense of justice—a pretty good protagonist. Sometimes though, I forget who the main character is; in only seven chapters, so much attention has also been given to the other characters (especially Beevs) in their point of view. They also hop into each other's head sometimes (kindly read up on head hopping). I was very much interested in solving the mystery of the missing artifact along with the main character. However, the pacing of the story feels too slow for me (maybe this is just me). I think the slow pace has to do with the description and narration. Too many words are used to explain something simple. Also, the writer feels the need to describe every little action the characters make (stage direction). This becomes a little too tedious to read. If this is the first draft, then it's understandable. With revisions in the next drafts, it should be a lot better. Then there's the punctuation, especially dialogue punctuation. I found it quite odd how the writer punctuated the dialogue. But I guess it's a matter of style. The dialogue also runs on for several paragraphs without any action or setting. It makes it hard to imagine the characters. But these are mostly technical issues that get better with more practice. So don't stop writing—I urge you to finish this book. I'll be here to read it all. I want to find out what happens next. All the best to you."
