What is your opinion?
I love it
"This is the absolute best thing that I have read on this app. I love your writing soooo much :)"
Interesting Plot!
"When I saw your post on the fanfiction group wall, I was interested in the concept of an anti-hero. I haven't really thought or speculated about a possible anti-hero, and I was super excited to read about a character along those lines. The story started off in a manner I did not expect. The very first chapter is quite overwhelming despite its small word count. There is a lot of information to take into account. It would be suitable for you to show readers the character's abilities in the plot's events (perhaps a PE lesson with All Might, that is up to you). Instead of telling the audience that the character is neutral, you should show it through the plot. It would be much more interesting to see the development of the character as an anti-hero and questioning citizen rather than reading about it straight off the bat. It would give a perfect opportunity to show the character's indirect characterisation and practice this component of story writing. Your writing style is unique but can be worked on through more description and background information as stated above. Chapters were slightly short and the main character's point of view doesn't seem to take enough time to talk about the world. Worldbuilding is important, and although the story is a fanfiction based off of a world which has already been established by another creator, it is still important to establish the setting in your story so that readers can understand what is going on. However, I do understand that the character is attending the hero's school UA Academy. I'm interested to see more interaction between the character and their best friends as well as their interactions, relationships and opinions toward other students. I want to know more about the character as the story goes on, what class they are from, how exactly their quirk works (this can be shown through a PE lesson or another event of your choice). Do they have any drawbacks to their quirks, in other words, do they have any sort of flaw or weakness upon using their quirk or with their quirk? I also want to know why the character has mixed feelings toward heroes and villains, and what leads them to become an anti-hero. Do they do something that is frowned upon in this universe? I'm also curious to learn more about the odd feeling the character feels at the beginning of chapter 2, and most importantly, about the hooded figure at the end of chapter 2. What leads them to believe they are being followed? Who is this mysterious stalker and why are they interested in the main protagonist? This is one of the parts of the plot that intrigues me the most, and I'm excited to see this be developed in the future. This is one of the strengths in your writing. Your use of mystery is what makes this story interesting. :) I apologise if my feedback has come off as harsh or over critical. I hope my feedback can help you in the future. :D"
