It has a lot of potential

"Overall, the plot itself is intriguing. I like how your main character can be relatable to the audience. Your technical writing skills are great, but I would try to use less parentheses, specifically when you're talking about his sister, Cat. I would also try to elaborate more on the character's relationship with his family. That's kind of what the first couple of chapters should be mostly centered on since he clearly doesn't have a good relationship with them, but you don't exactly talk about where it's rooted from. Does he remind his parents of another black sheep of the family or is there a family secret that he is unaware of? Something like that. But, overall I really enjoyed reading the first couple of chapters and I'm excited to see where this story will go."