What is your opinion?
A modern Superhero
"While teenage superhero stories are far from being my favourite genre, this one hits differently than most in its originality and its twist à la Batman, if you see where I'm going? "I couldn't protect someone else, so I should do something about it!" The characters are strong and believable, considering they are teenagers. Quite a few authors tend to make their 16-year-old characters slightly too adult than they should be (even though Miranda is mature for her age, which is part of her own individual personality). Also it is important to note the different personalities of each character we've seen so far: they are very much NOT alike one another! It might sound stupidly obvious, but I think we all know how it is: far too many stories introduce us to indistinguishable characters. Only the names change. UGH! Overall a very smooth, natural and fluid writing. A few descriptions and more action and dialogue, making the story fast paced. This author has not time to waste on nonsense!"
Good
"The first two chapters seemed really interesting and I'm waiting for the incoming updates. There were a few word slips but apart from that what I really liked about the story is Miranda's character owing to whatever you've presented here, in the first two chapters."
Dark
"I liked and enjoyed it, even though it was from a psycho's perspective, it was interesting to see how he became the man he became and all the things with the demons in his head, everything. Very creative, I wouldn't see him as a love interest though, just the villain? The female character is strong and persevering and I really liked her too! Anyway, I liked the story so far! Very interesting, keep writing! Much love, Coffee"
The Boxer
"Hi, I really enjoyed your first couple chapters of your story! I just have a few critiques to make your book potentially better (but use them as you please). - I feel like the introduction of your 'bad boy, love, interest' could be a bit less "I'm going to literally destroy you" if you know what I mean. Leaving out the bold letters and blending them in as the character thoughts might help it flow better with italicized print. Maybe something like: "I licked my lips as I eyed the pair up and down, they looked so happy, so, so, happy. And I despised them for that, that they could walk about happily while my life was a disaster. The taller female caught my eye immediately. . . . (later in)* **** I felt the urge creep up and into my throat, the monster was speaking to me again- telling me things I knew I shouldn't do. , , to kill, to murder, to hurt these women just as my mom had hurt me all these years. . . " Just as an example. Also, you noted that the character's eyes changed colors but I wasn't sure if this book was fiction or if it was rooted to normal day. Most people's eyes don't go terribly wacky that fast if they're off their meds. Another thing to you might want to insert in the beginning might be a flashback scene before your love interest is introduced potentially in a psych ward so the readers can be introduced to him before the main character is. Otherwise good read- I'm excited to see how this story progresses and I hope these comments find you well. Let me know if you have any questions! JC"
