Jacklyn Cole

I am a college student that enjoys writing fantasy/romance novels that excite the mind. I love long walks on the beach, helping my patients, and writing the romance novel!

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A High Level Reading Choice

Just by reading the descriptive summary when I first opened the book I felt like I was being thrown into an entirely different world. Obviously this writer has taken a large amount of time to fabricate a rich and descriptive world that has the ability to visually pull a reader into it. This plot is full of unexpected ideas and turns that are unlike the stereotypical fantasy/drama book. However, the level of reading can prove to be very challenging for a person who is unfamiliar with old terms and slang that was commonly used within the medieval/romantic times.
Even myself, who at one point in time was an extremely dedicated poet, had to reach for google for a couple words. That being said, there were only a few grammatical errors littered throughout the story. Unnoticeable for someone skimming the text. A few automatic spell changes perhaps? Or a mis-typed key here and there?
My criticism is I feel as though at some points this book is incredibly descriptive then it is engaging with dialog. Personally, I feel like sometimes letting the characters use their words versus describing what they are thinking is a good way to develop social communications within a book as well as maintain the interest of your readers; giving them a break in the text is always nice too. But that is just my opinion (and I'm sure it varies per person). I felt like at points I was struggling to read through the extremely long descriptive sentences, but the grammar was used appropriately which made it easier to read.
Overall, I really enjoyed the five chapters I read. I think this story has good potential to become something great and I look forwards to seeing how the new prince blossoms into a realm conquering, blood breathing, dragon lord that will take down the foes that are upon him! Happy writing!
Jackie Cole

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Review of the Princess Entourage

A love story tangled up within the themes of adventure and fantasy. The plot is very interesting- not something I was expecting. It steps out of the box of a classic adventure story too. It’s unpredictable and I’m enjoying the character buildup as the story progresses chapter by chapter. I wish there could be some relationship building between Beth and Daniel too (but maybe it's yet to come).
In terms of things I think could be improved. You could reread your story and perfect the grammar. There are more than 6-7 sentences or statements that are incoherent due to spell check changes.
I would absolutely love if you read back through and made some changes to the scenery and the background these characters are in. Is there a smell? A certain object that stands out to them in Phillips home? What color are the walls in Stella’s home?
You need to build the surroundings in order to pull the readers into the book.
That being said. I am not able to picture what the characters physical features are. Your readers should be able to draw a picture of them each time they're introduced.

Otherwise this book is definitely one I would finish reading once these changes are made! Keep up the good work and happy writing!

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What's Allegory All About?

Hello there,
My name is Jacklyn Cole and I was requested to give a good read through of your story and publish a truthful review! I have spent a decent amount of time re-reading through your story to make sure I could offer the best feedback to help your writing win a contest! Allegory is a fiction/fantasy novel that invites the reader into another world. The plot is very inviting and has the potential to become a tongue-tier if just the tweaks were edited. That being said, I am knowledgeable that the book is not yet complete- and that there is a lot more to add. Here are some things I've noticed:
1. I noticed that your book has a plethora of run on sentences. These could be corrected by simply reading your work out loud. Several sentences I noticed need semicolons and commas because they are statements that don't make sense without them. Ex: She turned to him in the dark holding her breath as to not smell him. There is a comma missing between dark and holding.
2. Most importantly, as an author you must describe or give meaning WITHIN the book text so that we know what is going on. Throughout the story I felt myself asking "What is a Triliane. . .. who is Zai?" Don't be afraid to explain things in the body of your writing, or through the memories of your characters to answer the readers questions.
3. I found myself wishing for a buildup. . .and a better explanation Roahan and Anadis. I feel like there should have been a bigger scene between the two of them meeting in the first/second chapter.
Overall, I think the book needs a good read through. I rated the book 3 stars because it was the average overall for my scores. This rating will improve to a definite 4 stars if that read through happens. The plot is fantastic. Spend a bit more time on your earlier chapters before the book progresses! You have the plot, just work on the guts. I'm really excited to see where this story goes and I hope that you have benefited from my detailed feedback.
Happy writing!
Jacklyn Cole

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Waves Break Into My Reading List

Although I have only read the first 10 chapters of this novel, I figured I had best pause and write a review mid-way. Waves Break On Unknown Shores is definitely a step out of genre for a romance writer but I figured I would offer my best review! I like how the story begins with a backstory of the characters. Each character is unique and described well, as though the author has stepped into the skin of the characters themselves.
Perhaps it is just me, but I find myself longing for a bit more action within the third and fourth chapters. Or maybe I should just continue to read the book and see what happens. The author does a great job with punctuation and grammar, and keeps the dialog to each of the characters. The plot unfolds nicely.
I'm excited to see how the story unfolds as I continue to read. Perhaps thrill lies just around the next page.
Happy writing!
Jackie

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