What is your opinion?
Good Short Story
"I didn't expect that Santa Claus would really show up and fight the creature! The details you wrote about Daniel's dream was really frightening. I could imagine how terrified Daniel was. I like how you gave The Holly King a believable background story. It was just like completing a boy's imagination, which I think made the story consistent, considering the main character's age. Well, I couldn't say much, but this is a good job, as expected :) Regards, Kei Angelus"
Frightening yet fun!
"The Holly King was an interesting take on an old legend and a battle of light versus what has become dark. I thought it was interesting, and the end was fun to read, but some of the "horror" elements (like Daniel's nightmare) seemed to set up the story for more horrific or gruesome things later that it never delivered on. I think if the nightmare was edited a bit, to be more in line with the atmosphere of the later scenes with the Holly King, this story would really come together. In truth, I thought the puppy aspect of the nightmare was a bit much; it just didn't fit with the rest of the tale at all. Apart from this, however, I enjoyed the author's portrayal of Santa Claus and the Holly King and I liked their take on the powers and personalities of each. The only other comment I have is that I found an error: "The door to his parents' bedroom was open a jar." Ajar is the word you're looking for here, and it means that something is partially open. So the sentence should be "The door to his parents' bedroom was ajar" or "was open a little", ect. I hope that helps in the future! Good job and keep writing!"
