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Cut the cord

"It is about love and how love can hurt two men about their feelings towards each other. The overall things the disasters and all that because the fashion angle is so over the top I did not see it as tragic. I do not know why the repeats of fashion made me feel less for them. Maybe because that meant they were mad about fashion or maybe it was because it is overall failings of communication between them. In fact I think they communicated through fashion because they love seeing each others clothes? But overall I thought it has promise and the promise is that one needs love actual love to survive in this world that no use pretending and no use being someone one is not."

Metaphors

"I loved the repetition of the balloon metaphor, however some of the phrasing was repetitive. Possibly finding new ways to refer back to the metaphor would strengthen your writing. I liked the depth at which you wrote at and the vocabulary was impressive."