Fun story!

"I really love stories that have to do with bitterness and having to overcome that. I liked the way that you worked it into the Wreck-it Ralph story through Vanellope. I read the first couple chapters and enjoyed it so far. I am intrigued to see what happens next. I haven't seen the movie in a while, so I would have liked to see more description in your writing, both of characters and setting. Also, I noticed in some grammatical errors in your dialogue. In places, you would say he said(") Dah dee dah." with the first quotation mark next to the dialogue tag instead of the dialogue itself, if that makes sense. I hope that this helps. Good work!"