Solid start!

"You've got quite a solid start here, with the apparent pranking (and subsequent discovery of time-warping). I also like your attention to detail and the pacing of the story. Quite a good job! However, if I may bring a point of critique: I saw that you have the tendency to put lots of words in one part, all together without any spacing between them. Don't be afraid to break big walls of texts into easier-to-read morsels for your readers. It's easier on their eyes, and easier for you to search for any potential mistakes and to keep track of where the story is. However, this is a very solid start! Keep up the good work!"